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Thursday, 5 March 2015

Astro

Astro He can sent bad people out and if you ask him to do a trick then he will ripe off your arm. Astro can chop a persons leg off with his own tail. And he can tear people into sreads with one scratch. 

Astro has a brown body and he has green patches on his paws from the woods. He has wild eyes that stare at people. His tail always stays up but never wiggles it.

 He is kind of like a quide dog to help people find thier way back home. He's always in a good mood well most of the time. Astro doesn't like licking him self cause he doesn't like fur that much. He always likes to get people's atention but all he gets is squirted with chilly sauce. He has
a lot of feelings inside of him but on the outside he's like a mean lion. I think that Astro is the king of 
the woods.



“Characters”
Purpose: To describe an interesting character so we can tell a story about them at the Marae stay. 
WALT: Entertain (character description)
Task:
Think of a character you could write about.
Draw them.  
Introduce your character in an entertaining way.
Describe their looks.  
Describe their personality.  
I think/feel statement (Conclusion / Summary)

Criteria: I can
Self Assessment

Descriptive vocabulary (words that help to SHOW the reader)
  • use a range of verbs
Language features (phrases that help paint a picture)
  • select one or two similes
  • use onomatopoeia to show sounds
  • select words that start with the same sound (alliteration)
My writing is 2-3 paragraphs (100 - 200 words)

The Learning Partner Comment
Feedback: I love the way you entertained me at the start

Feedforward: Next time you could put an onomatopoeia in
Name: Abby 
Overall, how well do you think your learning partner has done?Cc





2 comments:

  1. Almost there! All you need to add is an image of your picture plan and your draft.

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  2. Almost there! All you need to add is an image of your picture plan and your draft.

    ReplyDelete