Astro has a brown body and he has green patches on his paws from the woods. He has wild eyes that stare at people. His tail always stays up but never wiggles it.
He is kind of like a quide dog to help people find thier way back home. He's always in a good mood well most of the time. Astro doesn't like licking him self cause he doesn't like fur that much. He always likes to get people's atention but all he gets is squirted with chilly sauce. He has
a lot of feelings inside of him but on the outside he's like a mean lion. I think that Astro is the king of
Purpose: To describe an interesting character so we can tell a story about them at the Marae stay.
WALT: Entertain (character description)
Think of a character you could write about.
Introduce your character in an entertaining way.
Describe their looks.
Describe their personality.
I think/feel statement (Conclusion / Summary)
Criteria: I can
Descriptive vocabulary (words that help to SHOW the reader)
- use a range of verbs
Language features (phrases that help paint a picture)
- select one or two similes
- use onomatopoeia to show sounds
- select words that start with the same sound (alliteration)
My writing is 2-3 paragraphs (100 - 200 words)
The Learning Partner Comment
Feedback: I love the way you entertained me at the start
Feedforward: Next time you could put an onomatopoeia in
Overall, how well do you think your learning partner has done?Cc